[freerideuk]

i'm a friendly,outgoing individual aiming to obtain a postion as a sales assistant, which will allow me to utilise my existing experience with working and dealing with members of the public and to work as part of a team in a young and exciting enviroment.

i got told it has too be within a couple of sentences and to tell the employer you carreer goal and tell them your strenghs

to me my profile sounds rubbish can anyone help me with it ?

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[quote="freerideuk"]i'm a friendly,outgoing individual aiming to obtain a postion as a sales assistant, which will allow me to utilise my existing experience with working and dealing with members of the public and to work as part of a team in a young and exciting enviroment.

i got told it has too be within a couple of sentences and to tell the employer you carreer goal and tell them your strenghs

to me my profile sounds rubbish can anyone help me with it ?

xxxx[/quote]

Hi and welcome to our messageboard!

To be honest, we see profiles like this every day. If you're looking to obtain a position as a Sales Assistant, you should re-write the profile to showcase more skills specifically required for the position.

You're on the right lines by highlighting experience in customer service and working with people but you should replace this sentence, "i'm a friendly,outgoing individual aiming to obtain a postion as a sales assistant" with something more eye-catching - especially as it's the first line of your CV.

Also, avoid writing your profile with "I am...., I did...." etc.

Once you've ammended your profile, feel free to pop back here and we'll have another look for you.